Moving from Idea to Thesis Statement

  • To take a position on your thesis you can have a bit of a subjective thought process to back up your claims which in turn have more of your opinion but as long as it can also be seen objectively it should be viable enough to be a strong thesis.
  • It has strengthened my thesis personally because it has shown me different routes to go about while looking for certain key points to write about and how to write about them. I can further develop my own claims by digging into more perspectives that perhaps the audience has and how the exigence can be used properly.
  • My ideas are working theses technically because they are subject to change and be modified. This provides infinitely more freedom than a typical concrete thesis that has to argue one point and one point only versus a working thesis which can alternate between various subjects all in one sentence.
  • A strong thesis would be one that holds value in the argument you uphold versus a weak thesis being flimsy and easy to deface. A weak version of my thesis would be: The TED blog is good for inspiring people and spreading ideas. Now a stronger thesis would be: The TED Blog exists to inspire people around the world and encourages anyone and everyone who has an idea to communicate with one another about it so that knowledge can be spread and celebrated in an engaging way.
  • The feature of my subject would probably be my highlight of how TED spreads information in a cool way. This is more a special feature because it’s an argument that’s not easily defaced and it’s intriguing to about anyone who would be interested in checking that blog out. This is evident because there are various kinds of people on the feed of the website talking about thousands of different subject matters.
  • My thesis is in need of an argument because it needs to be countered. It needs to be spoken about from a perspective other than mine. With that, it can be debated on and be either proved correct or wrong depending on the individual.


Try This 11.1

  1. The tension can immediately be found in the first phrase, “it may not seem like it, but.” That right there sounds like a setup for a phrase that is about to be written that can possibly be offensive by default. The primary idea is that this “Nice Pants” is a radical campaign along with the Docker series while the back pressure is essentially saying that it’s not really a radical campaign but a logical thing to talk about.
  2. Tension is found particularly at the end of the thesis when, “in the aggregate it makes life worse for everyone.” It’s actually a false statement, cosmetic surgery is NOT bad for everyone, which could easily get a rise out of people who believe the same thing. The primary idea is that if people who oppose cosmetic surgery easily give in to those who argue against it and change their views then life will basically be worse for everyone while the back pressure would be cosmetic surgery could make all the individuals that get it happy and that it doesn’t affect anyone else.
  3. There’s a lot less tension in this example because of the word “surely”. Just that word gives space to oppose the thesis without many hard feelings. The primary idea is that the way the history of thought towards one’s self is thought to be a bit excessive but there is “surely” feelings that are similar to this from every kind of inquiry. The back pressure could simply be that the history of thought isn’t as excessive as it is written out to be.
  4. The tension is more subtle but it is within the second sentence of the thesis. That’s where it can be argumentative. The primary idea is that builders and constructive engineers do not look at what they are hacking down in order to build on top of, that being nature. The back pressure could be that builders do these things in order to provide certain environments and work places to create a more efficient place for some people to work and benefit the human race.
  5. This thesis does not have much room for tension, it’s basically just an opinion. The primary idea is that middlebrow should be brought back into rotation for common use instead of being closeted for so long. Back pressure could be applied by stating that middlebrow should simply be ignored instead being brought back into whatever fashion is being written about.
  6. Tension can quickly be created with saying that cell phones are not proper engagement with others. Ask any teenager. The primary idea is that places hold a unique experience key to one’s own perspective and with other people versus that cell phones simply are not significant enough to hold experiences with other people. A lot of back pressure can be applied to this argument because sometimes people can’t be physically together in one place so they can use cell phones to communicate with each other while they are apart from one another.

Straw Man

  • A straw man can easily be created from the first thesis example. There is easily not enough info to back up the argument so it can be turned against without too much effort. A way to make this thesis statement even weaker would be: “Nice Pants” is pretty intense like the Docker series.

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